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"This is Just to Say" by William Carlos Williams
POST YOUR OWN "APOLOGY" POEM AND COMMENT ON A CLASSMATE'S POEM.
Cassidy's poem had a cool rhythm, but was nothing like the example. I did not know what you wanted the poem to look like, but Cassidy's poem was deffinetly clever. Every person has a differnt poetic side to them, but no offense "This is just to say" poem was something a 5 year old could think of. I personally think Cassidy's poem was 10 times better.
I personally like Cassidy's poem better than "This Is Just To Say." Cassidy's sounds more sophisticated and has more meaning to it. The one we read is, as Conor said, something a 5 year old could write. Conor's poem sounds more like he is sorry than the example, but overall, Cassidy's is very deep and clever.
So far out of all of the poems, I enjoyed Connor's the most. I think that his got the point across the best because the poem speaks about the door being open and it being so dark. I could imagine that as meaning that the author was welcoming something so dark into his life. Something that was "so dark" and "so cold". And now he apoligizes for that. He acts as if he is sorry that he welcomed something so dark into his life. Overall, I really enjoyed reading this poem.
and realized you might have needed it to travel to work
Forgive me it was so fun what a crazy joyride
-Maxine H P2
So far i think i like cassidy's poem the best, even better than the original one we looked at. I like it because it has a rhythm and flows very well, and also the fact that it rhymes makes it cool too and you can tell that she probably took some time on it because it makes sense and it also rhymes, something that i find hard to do right on the spot. And it seems like she took a personal experience and then wrote about it too which i liked.
Forgive me I had better things to do Anna B., period 2 I agree that Cassidy’s poem is very good and she put a lot of effort into it, but it doesn’t really follow the example. Personally, I like Maxine’s poem the best. It is kind of funny and I can relate to it.
Personally, I like Cassidy's poem better than "This is Just to Say" because it sounds a lot more sophisticated and thoughtful. You can tell she really took time to write it, where as the example we read seems like it could've been written by a kid in elementary school.
and happened to see your password for your email and Facebook
Forgive me I think you should probably change them now
I really like Cassidy’s poem as it seems that she wrote it very well and got the point of expanding from the idea that was given by Williams’ poem. The other poems that were quite fun to me were Anna’s and Katlyn’s as they both are what I can relate with because we get tons of homework, but we can’t always do all of it because of all the activities that most do after school that take a while.
In my earlier post, I commented on Connor's poem and mistakenly posted an apology poem off of the internet. After coming back and reading some I realized I misunderstood the assignment.. So here is my OWN made poem:
Forgive Me Now.
Forgive me now for all the wrong I have done.
Forgive me now for the whole lump sum.
I am aware of all my wrong doings and promise to never repeat them, I swear I am done.
I don't eat meat... Just something weird that makes me feel discrete.
We don't have the same opinions. Completely different beilefs. You can eat your burger, but I ain't touching that beef.
You can say I'm weird or how I'm completely bizarre. I'm sorry for being different. But hey, most of us are.
I liked Katlyn's poem more than the original one we looked at because I can relate to it. I also thought Cassidy's poem and could tell she put a lot of effort into it. Julia's poem also stood out to me because it was short and sweet, which is what prefer when reading poetry.
please forgive me for not coming to class today. I know that I may come to class late everyday but try to understand
I cannot resist sleeping in an extra 10 minutes. I would rather be laying in a bed than sitting at a desk.
please forgive me for choosing my bed over class. next time I'm late I'll just get a pass.
I really liked Cassidy's poem. I think she did a really good job writing it and it sounded very poetic. Hers was also more detailed than the original poem. Cassidy's poem was 100 times better than "This is just to say". This is just to say was a kind of goofy poem and Cassidy's was much more thoughtful and meaningful.
SORROW
ReplyDeleteI just feel so much guilt,
That my words and actions built.
I know, what I did was wrong,
Tried to avoid it, and be strong.
Following me has been the truth,
It was hurting like a noose.
I could not deny,
Not apologizing was a lie.
I'm so sorry, from deep inside,
Clearly guilty, my hands are tied.
It was obviously, all my fault,
I'm sorry I have came to a hault.
Cassidy M P2
I have opened
ReplyDeletethe door
that was
in the basement
That said
keep out
But I
just couldnt
I'm sorry
do you forgive me
so dark
so cold
Conor Smith P2
Cassidy's poem had a cool rhythm, but was nothing like the example. I did not know what you wanted the poem to look like, but Cassidy's poem was deffinetly clever. Every person has a differnt poetic side to them, but no offense "This is just to say" poem was something a 5 year old could think of. I personally think Cassidy's poem was 10 times better.
ReplyDeleteConor Smith P2
Fair Warning
ReplyDeleteI have opened
the door
that was
in the basement
That said
keep out
But I
just couldnt
I'm sorry
do you forgive me
so dark
so cold
Conor Smith P2
sorry i forgot the title in the first post
I personally like Cassidy's poem better than "This Is Just To Say." Cassidy's sounds more sophisticated and has more meaning to it. The one we read is, as Conor said, something a 5 year old could write. Conor's poem sounds more like he is sorry than the example, but overall, Cassidy's is very deep and clever.
ReplyDeleteRebecca W.
Not Perfect
ReplyDeleteIm sorry
for not being perfect
for not listening
for not loving you
as much as i should
forgive me
Julia Watsky P2
Sorry
ReplyDelete© Whitestar
I love you so very much,
Even thou at times I do things that hurt,
I try so hard to hope that you always see,
How much you being in my life means to me,
I am sorry yet again for causing you pain,
that is the last thing I ever wanted to do,
Even when I am trying to look out for you and do the right thing
I mess up, I am sorry for that too.
I hope that you still know how much I love and cherish you,
Like nothing else in my life gives me the trill of being loved by you.
So I hope that you listen and see it in my eyes,
this sincere apology that comes with tears from deep inside.
Source: Apologize Poem, Sorry http://www.familyfriendpoems.com/poem/apologize#ixzz2DYNx8f3T
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Isabella Suppa Period 2
Response to Connor's poem:
So far out of all of the poems, I enjoyed Connor's the most. I think that his got the point across the best because the poem speaks about the door being open and it being so dark. I could imagine that as meaning that the author was welcoming something so dark into his life. Something that was "so dark" and "so cold". And now he apoligizes for that. He acts as if he is sorry that he welcomed something so dark into his life. Overall, I really enjoyed reading this poem.
Isabella Suppa Period 2
Today i took
ReplyDeletethe car
that was in
the garage
and realized
you might have needed
it to travel to work
Forgive me
it was so fun
what a
crazy joyride
-Maxine H P2
So far i think i like cassidy's poem the best, even better than the original one we looked at. I like it because it has a rhythm and flows very well, and also the fact that it rhymes makes it cool too and you can tell that she probably took some time on it because it makes sense and it also rhymes, something that i find hard to do right on the spot. And it seems like she took a personal experience and then wrote about it too which i liked.
Homework
ReplyDeleteI didn’t do
my homework
that was
due today
and now
I will probably
Ffail
this class
Forgive me
I had better
things
to do
Anna B., period 2
I agree that Cassidy’s poem is very good and she put a lot of effort into it, but it doesn’t really follow the example. Personally, I like Maxine’s poem the best. It is kind of funny and I can relate to it.
Too many tests
ReplyDeleteI didn't study
for my test
that I took
today
and now
I will no longer
have an A+
Forgive me
AP Psych
is more
important
Personally, I like Cassidy's poem better than "This is Just to Say" because it sounds a lot more sophisticated and thoughtful. You can tell she really took time to write it, where as the example we read seems like it could've been written by a kid in elementary school.
Katlyn G. Period 2
I took your
ReplyDeletelaptop for
a school
project yesterday
and happened
to see your password
for your email
and Facebook
Forgive me
I think you
should probably
change them now
I really like Cassidy’s poem as it seems that she wrote it very well and got the point of expanding from the idea that was given by Williams’ poem. The other poems that were quite fun to me were Anna’s and Katlyn’s as they both are what I can relate with because we get tons of homework, but we can’t always do all of it because of all the activities that most do after school that take a while.
Quinn Bohan - Period 2
In my earlier post, I commented on Connor's poem and mistakenly posted an apology poem off of the internet. After coming back and reading some I realized I misunderstood the assignment.. So here is my OWN made poem:
ReplyDeleteForgive Me Now.
Forgive me now
for all the wrong I
have done.
Forgive me now for
the whole lump sum.
I am aware of all my
wrong doings and
promise to never
repeat them, I swear
I am done.
Forgive me now
for all that I have done.
--------
Sorry for the confusion Mrs.Baker!!
Isabella S.
Period 2
I didn't do
ReplyDeletethe homework
for class
due today
Forgive me,
it was hard
and it took
too much time
I'm sorry
that I really
just like to
sleep
Rebecca W.
I'm Sorry For Being Different
ReplyDeleteI don't eat meat...
Just something weird
that makes me feel
discrete.
We don't have the same
opinions.
Completely different beilefs.
You can eat your burger,
but I ain't touching
that beef.
You can say I'm weird
or how I'm completely
bizarre.
I'm sorry for being
different.
But hey, most of us are.
I liked Katlyn's poem more than the original one we looked at because I can relate to it. I also thought Cassidy's poem and could tell she put a lot of effort into it. Julia's poem also stood out to me because it was short and sweet, which is what prefer when reading poetry.
Morgan L p.2
please forgive me
ReplyDeletefor not coming
to class today.
I know that
I may come to
class late everyday
but try to understand
I cannot resist
sleeping in an
extra 10 minutes.
I would rather be
laying in a bed than
sitting at a desk.
please forgive me
for choosing my
bed over class.
next time I'm late
I'll just get a pass.
I really liked Cassidy's poem. I think she did a really good job writing it and it sounded very poetic. Hers was also more detailed than the original poem. Cassidy's poem was 100 times better than "This is just to say". This is just to say was a kind of goofy poem and Cassidy's was much more thoughtful and meaningful.
Jackie W. p.2
Mom, it was me.
ReplyDeleteYour car
Has a dent
in the back.
I hit
A pole at the mall
It's bad
Really bad
I'm so sorry
Tell dad it was Bit
And call
Giovanni
-Brian Fitter Period 2 November 30, 2012